Ever The Hero

This was interesting but a bit of a mess. The set-up and the ideas are fascinating, but there are too many times when the author's focus doesn't tell the story. A major development between two characters at the start gets glided over and we end up getting told a lot about the importance of their relationship, but it never feels like we've been shown it. Some parts when the narrative jumps around are part of a literary device and the stream-of-consciousness nature of the storytelling, but others feel like the author not checking on themselves. There are quite a few parts in this that feel like they really needed a good editing and proofreading before publication. The heart of the story and the key ideas are good, but the execution doesn't deliver on that promise.